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Critique for Justin Monick

Justin Monick Sep '10

My show I'm designing is based on "The Lottery", a short stroy by Shirley Jackson. Any tips/ critique?

micromarching.com/preview/justin-monick

Bryan LaHaise Sep '10

Throw some lottery symbol's in their as a impact set. Like three 7's or three cherrie's, or write out the word Jackpot, or a $ symbol, so that people get the hint of what the show's story line is about. Nice drill otherwise.

Adamjd Sep '10

There's very few things I can critique in this show, other than you've done a lot of drill right in the center. Maybe try and move the band into one of the corners, just to give the viewers some more visual entertainment (to add to what you've already got). =) Awesome show so far!

Mylin Sep '10